Tell me what ya think, rate and slate ;)
Wrote this for a competition btw, it had to start with "Once upon a time" and end with "and they all lived happily ever after"
Don't be too harsh, oh and it's my first poem I've ever wrote :o
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Tell me what ya think, rate and slate ;)
Wrote this for a competition btw, it had to start with "Once upon a time" and end with "and they all lived happily ever after"
Don't be too harsh, oh and it's my first poem I've ever wrote :o
That really isn't bad at all, well done :D +rep
Only thing is there's something so much more, how do I put it?... romantic and soppy in the first and last verse compared to the middle one. It just doesn't seems a bit out of place compared to the other two verses if you get me. I think it's just the first couple of lines of that verse.
Edit: Oh flippin' heck you changed the verses around lol. I mean the second verse now.
It's good :D!
I actually can relate to that tbh. +rep.