Paul Saw Everything (HW Peice i did)

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Originally Posted by Benjiwenji1

It's really quite good.
If I wanted to be harsh and extremely picky, I could pull a few mistakes out of it but only if I were to be amazingly harsh. It's great.

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Thank you :) and ofc there is always mistakes in any peice of writing :P

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Originally Posted by adidas™

wow, impressed mate :)
if i could write like that, then maybe i would of got better than a C in my english GCSE. lol ;)

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Thanks lol, well another year or two til my GCSEs and i dont think ill do too good but if i write like that maybe i will do alright :]

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Originally Posted by NaughtyNemo

Thank you :) and ofc there is always mistakes in any peice of writing :P

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Not necessarily... :)

nice use of sentane lenghs important for sats as they focus on it eg when horror is there shout and sharp sentances

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Originally Posted by urmum

Not necessarily... :)

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I was on about my peices of writing hehe :P

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Originally Posted by hayd93

nice use of sentane lenghs important for sats as they focus on it eg when horror is there shout and sharp sentances

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Thanks, and yeah ive got quite a good english teacher this year so i have a feeling i will do better than last year where i had the worst english teacher ever and we learnt nothing and just read all year.

Nah. You'll still improve.
The overlap with GCSE grades & levels are something like 7 = C etc.
& from year 10 to the end of year 11 it's said that grades on average improve by 2 or so, if the work is put in.
With 7s now it's still promising.

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Originally Posted by urmum

Nah. You'll still improve.
The overlap with GCSE grades & levels are something like 7 = C etc.
& from year 10 to the end of year 11 it's said that grades on average improve by 2 or so, if the work is put in.
With 7s now it's still promising.

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Hmm, thanks for sharing that hehe :P but yeah, ill have to work hard in these few years coming up, and i think smartness runs in my family LMAO! My uncle went to oxford, my sister is going oxford... im destined :P

Before I give any review on this, how old are you? Because it could be seen as a fairly good piece for someone on the lower end of the age spectrum here, or a fairly poor piece if you are, say, a GCSE/A-level writer

he's 12/13 tom m8.

I'm 13 and in year 9 :)

A'ight cool, with that in mind then it's really rather good. One thing to watch out for is too much repetition - it's a good thing in small doses but having "he" or "Paul" at the start of each clause does make it a bit heavy on the brain :P