Paul Saw Everything (HW Peice i did)

[Nemo]

It's really quite good.
If I wanted to be harsh and extremely picky, I could pull a few mistakes out of it but only if I were to be amazingly harsh. It's great.

Thank you and ofc there is always mistakes in any peice of writing

wow, impressed mate
if i could write like that, then maybe i would of got better than a C in my english GCSE. lol

Thanks lol, well another year or two til my GCSEs and i dont think ill do too good but if i write like that maybe i will do alright :]

[Tristan]

Thank you and ofc there is always mistakes in any peice of writing

Not necessarily...

[Hayd93]

nice use of sentane lenghs important for sats as they focus on it eg when horror is there shout and sharp sentances

[Nemo]

Not necessarily...

I was on about my peices of writing hehe

nice use of sentane lenghs important for sats as they focus on it eg when horror is there shout and sharp sentances

Thanks, and yeah ive got quite a good english teacher this year so i have a feeling i will do better than last year where i had the worst english teacher ever and we learnt nothing and just read all year.

[Tristan]

Nah. You'll still improve.
The overlap with GCSE grades & levels are something like 7 = C etc.
& from year 10 to the end of year 11 it's said that grades on average improve by 2 or so, if the work is put in.
With 7s now it's still promising.

[Nemo]

Nah. You'll still improve.
The overlap with GCSE grades & levels are something like 7 = C etc.
& from year 10 to the end of year 11 it's said that grades on average improve by 2 or so, if the work is put in.
With 7s now it's still promising.

Hmm, thanks for sharing that hehe but yeah, ill have to work hard in these few years coming up, and i think smartness runs in my family LMAO! My uncle went to oxford, my sister is going oxford... im destined

[FlyingJesus]

Before I give any review on this, how old are you? Because it could be seen as a fairly good piece for someone on the lower end of the age spectrum here, or a fairly poor piece if you are, say, a GCSE/A-level writer

[Tristan]

he's 12/13 tom m8.

[Nemo]

I'm 13 and in year 9

[FlyingJesus]

A'ight cool, with that in mind then it's really rather good. One thing to watch out for is too much repetition - it's a good thing in small doses but having "he" or "Paul" at the start of each clause does make it a bit heavy on the brain