I decided to try and write a poem for the Newcastle Fans, I aint yet done but would like your feedback :eusa_clap
King Kev is back they said
A reincarnated dream
But that was soon dead
The light only gleamed
Captain's arm band given to Owen
It was a bit sudden
Newcastle's relegated he'll soon be goin'
Doubt he'll have any more trips to London
Smith relegated twice
Leeds and toon
His future? Roll the dice
As soon as he joined, it was doom
Ashley wants 100 Million
10 pounds he got, from a manager in the Pertelee Sunday League
Ashley couldn't even afford a pavilion
The toon fans, full of fatigue
Alan Shearer
Brought in to save the club
Only made the fall dearer
Now he's off to the pub
Oh well, Leeds will soon await
A year or two to fall again
It's a date!
Ashley may as well sell it off on Dragon's Den
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Thread: A Newcastle Poem
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A Newcastle Poem
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I think it's crap.
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doesn't sound very good. i get what you're trying to say but yeah doesn't flow
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it's crap.
Last edited by Wootzeh; 11-06-2009 at 02:47 PM.
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Sorry I hate to be critical but it kinda has no rhythm to it what so ever.
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sucks ass tbf.
Last edited by dirrty; 11-06-2009 at 10:01 PM.
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Originally Posted by Geraint
Originally Posted by Immenseman
Originally Posted by Wootzeh
Originally Posted by brandon
Sorry I hate to be critical but it kinda has no rhythm to it what so ever.HE AINT YET DONE GOD. Originally Posted by Wolverhampton
Anyway needs improvents, good effort tho.Last edited by dirrty; 11-06-2009 at 10:01 PM.
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11-06-2009, 03:36 PM #8
No beat to it but atleast you ain't done yet
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Oh crap I didn't know he wrote it himself, serves me rite for not reading the thread!!
Sorry, yeah, It could be better with a few improvements!
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Good effort but needs improvement
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