:D my 1st peice of coursework!!!

[FlyingJesus]

Because "loosing" is still a word, as in "to loosen" (like a knot or something).

Anyhooo, apart from that one spelling mistake I think it's rather well written, with some very nice ideas for the future of the story. Also it is a nice change from what people usually write about, and I think it's likely to turn out better than any murder/horror story that'll be done in the class as it's difficult to write horrors at the best of times, let alone when you're a young'n ^_^

Hope all goes well with the continuation of it, keep up the good work

[Ree...]

Because "loosing" is still a word, as in "to loosen" (like a knot or something).

Anyhooo, apart from that one spelling mistake I think it's rather well written, with some very nice ideas for the future of the story. Also it is a nice change from what people usually write about, and I think it's likely to turn out better than any murder/horror story that'll be done in the class as it's difficult to write horrors at the best of times, let alone when you're a young'n ^_^

Hope all goes well with the continuation of it, keep up the good work

aint that loosening? :S
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[FlyingJesus]

Yeah loosening and loosing can both be used in the same context, it does get pretty confusing this darned English language.