If anyones gonna steal it its gonna be me... lol Im doing the same coursework as him lol. Lol James in about a week I need to do one of thoseOriginally Posted by PaulMacC
. Oh and erm... its not very detailed, and you skipped the movie parts to hastily. Sorry... hope you can edit in time for Mondaii or whatever.
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Last edited by ItsDave; 02-11-2007 at 09:50 PM.
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you know they google the first few lines or w/e so you could get done for plagarism by posting it here tbh but idk.
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Googled the first few lines and found this:
http://boardreader.com/tp/Plane+One.html
hmmm...
drink up this bottle of yeah
and P A I N T your body on me
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decent
better so far than any of my corse work 
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wow, very good.
I like it
"One grabbed me and through me." should be threw
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Erm, "steering sticks", change it to throttle, or sterring wheel or something.
very good though (Y)
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lol i didnt actually have enough time to change it at all before i had to hand it in (tuesday) and i am very happy to announce i got a B for it
by my enlighs teacher so thats 2 pieces of coursework out of 5 and two B's YAY
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We did that a couple of weeks ago, I got a B. Anyway, yours is awesome!
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Good story.
I think it's a good peice of writing, however I don't think the vocabulary was great.
And yeah, I'd say a B is about right.
Well Done.
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I liked it.
Well done.
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I thought it was good, maybe a little more description... to add a bit more panic would really liven it up and make the reader feel like they're there, but besides from that, it's a good piece of work!
well done
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