It was all about her wasn't it!

[Addie]

Lmao..you were supposed to write your own thingy. Mine was just an example. Also you were supposed to do the whole story with more detail not just the first part.

Rofl. x] :rolleyes:

[mynameishelen!]

When someone new starts talking, go onto the next line.

"What do you want?" I murmmered. " I was wondering if you wanted to come shopping with me today?" Jessica said happily. "Nah, I dont really feel like shopping I feel sort of sick" I said. "Okay, suit yourself", Jessica said walking out of my room. I thought why did she even ask? I fell back to sleep a few minutes after she left.

that should be :

"What do you want?" I murmmered.
" I was wondering if you wanted to come shopping with me today?" Jessica said happily.
"Nah, I dont really feel like shopping I feel sort of sick" I said.
"Okay, suit yourself", Jessica said walking out of my room. I thought why did she even ask? I fell back to sleep a few minutes after she left.

It's easier to understand and follow, and that's how your meant to do it

[Addie]

When someone new starts talking, go onto the next line.

"What do you want?" I murmmered. " I was wondering if you wanted to come shopping with me today?" Jessica said happily. "Nah, I dont really feel like shopping I feel sort of sick" I said. "Okay, suit yourself", Jessica said walking out of my room. I thought why did she even ask? I fell back to sleep a few minutes after she left.

that should be :

"What do you want?" I murmmered.
" I was wondering if you wanted to come shopping with me today?" Jessica said happily.
"Nah, I dont really feel like shopping I feel sort of sick" I said.
"Okay, suit yourself", Jessica said walking out of my room. I thought why did she even ask? I fell back to sleep a few minutes after she left.

It's easier to understand and follow, and that's how your meant to do it

I know. I keep forgeting to do that.

[.Lynn]

So now.. you should be editing your story with the new things you learned. :rolleyes:

[Addie]

So now.. you should be editing your story with the new things you learned. :rolleyes:

Lol. Ill start again later. Im going to bed. Good Night. Its just about 3am. Shocking. And Amber is comming to my house today. I'll probarly be asleep when she comes but w/e lol. Anyways Night. Have a great sleep