Make The Change (Poem)

[Captainace$]

haha thanks, here are some more of my poems

Dawn Of Autumn
Autumn leaves flutter down to the ground
Creating a carpet of orange, yellow and red
Birds emitting soft soothing sounds
A few trees already looking leafless, bare and dead
In the early mornings light another day comes into view
The sun rises up across the dawns sky casting a golden glow
Slowly the golden glow vanishes leaving no clue
Trees move in the rythem of the breeze as it blows
Autumn turns into winter with each day that comes and goes
Weather becoming colder as the leaves continue to fall
People that venture out wear warmer clothes
While in the trees though leafless and bare will always stand tall


You know when christmas is coming
You know when christmas is coming when the weather turns cold
Robins begin to show themselves while christmas stories are told
Soon the decorations will be put all around the house
The night before christmas everything is as quiet as a mouse
You know when christmas is coming when frost is upon the ground
Appearing like glitter when the winters sun shines all around
The winter trees are standing looking leafless and bare
Your glad that your inside where its warm not standing out there
You know when christmas is coming when the snow begins to fall
Lying lightly on the ground, a happy feeling is felt by all
Houses are now decorated, christmas lights are turned on
Christmas is not far away, You dont have to wait for very long


Beautiful Storm
Grey clouds across the sky
As thunder rumbles through
Lightning flashes before your eyes
Rain comes down too
The storm has begun now
Its at its strongest peak
Horses, Mice, Birds and cows
All make no sound, not even a squeak
A storm is a beautiful thing
If you take the time to watch it
No one can predict what a storm will bring
So as one last time the sky is lit
With its lightning bolts
Charged with high volts
The storm fades leaving no trace
Thunder moving into the horizon towards another place

[Wig44.]

I don't like the fact that everyone seems to think that rhyming is necessary in every poem.

I've read a few of your poems, I don't like to put people down but I don't think they are that great, it's nothing personal! It feels like they have been written for the sake of writing them. You should brush up on your grammar, and use more powerful adjectives for a start. The poems feel a little drab to me, I can't feel an image behind them.

Sorry I couldn't be very positive, but it's constructive criticism!

[Narnat,]

Those are some really nice poems You have defo got talent :eusa_clap