Right the other day i was cleaning out some bits and bobs from under my bed when i found a piece of paper which had a poem wrote on it. I then remembered that i wrote this when i was 12 when i first had my heart broken. Hold your sympathy. lol. I thought this poem was good enough to show to you guys! Please rate. Thanks.
A Broken Man
I sit alone
In a crowded room
Dreaming
Dreaming of you
I used to watch
Watch you from a'far.
Your Hair Like Fire
Your eyes like heaven
If i knew then
what i know now
It wouldnt of made any differnce
For my heart was yours
I fell at your feet
3 times or more
Hoping that i could be yours
My hopes came true
When i was yours
And You were mine
The sun seemed brighter
And i forgot all my fears
Time went on
People grew
People Changed
So did you
I soon realised
what was coming
The day came closer
The day of the "dumping"
When you spoke
I felt lighter than air
But not this time
not this time
So now i stand before you
A broken Man
And i want you to know
Thats all i am
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07-04-2005, 02:13 PM #2
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damn that reminds me of myself because i never will be able to ask out Jenny (girl i fancy) cus im nervous...
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07-04-2005, 02:15 PM #3
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Extremely well-written and mature.
Hi.
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Just go for it... you will regret it if you dont.
God i sound like an agony aunt
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07-04-2005, 02:21 PM #5
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well give me some advice...
Cus the people at school (her & my friends) meddle with your 'love' and make it end because of their nagging and keep on saying 'go on kiss her' and 'you 2 are so fridged'.
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Man thats good, well written and very mature, very good poem
Dirge Of Cerberus
From here, a hunt is taking place over the entire world.
For the worthless prey, massacre and atrocities are planned...
It's the beginning of the end...
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