just didnt think

[superstar911]

when jack woke up this morning he didnt think today was going to be any different, he didnt think this would be his last day on earth, he just didnt think! maybe if jack thought before doing he'd still be alive, but hes not because he didn't.

Jack got up one saturday morning and recieved a message from his friend nathan. The message read 'meet me shopping centre 9pm'

Jacks day went on as normal, he went to the gym, played on the computer, chatted to his girlfriend, then went out. as he was going out his mum yelled "be careful" but jack didnt listen. maybe if jack listened this wouldnt be his last day on earth, he just didnt listen.

jack met nathan at the shopping centre and the night went on. nathan took out a bottle of vodka and gave it to jack. jacks little sister always talked about the dangers of alcohol but no jack didnt pay attention. maybe if jack payed attention this wouldn't have been his last day on earth. he just didnt pay attention.

jack seen nathan had more than one bottle of vodka in his rucksack and jack knew tonight he was going to get drunk for the first time, jacks instincts told him no but jack didnt trust his insticts, maybe if jack trusted his instincts this wouldn't of been his last day on earth. but no jack ignored his insticts.

an hour on jack was drunk, nathan sober. jack seen his uncle walking on the other side of the road. jack ran across the road to meet his unclue but fell. nathan stood watching as a bus neared, nathan did nothing and jacks uncle never noticed jack on the road and walked on. the bus hit jack, he died instantly.

if jack had thought, if jack had listened, if jack had payed attention and if jack trusted his insticts he would of grew up to be a movie star, but now hes gone. you see kids one small decision today could change all of your tomorrows.



i wrote this to make people aware that not doing a simple thing as thinking could change your life. sorry if anyone is offened by this story.



so what do you think, going to hand this in as part of my english homework (after i fix errors) anyone like it or have constructive critism for me.

[PigsNose]

A little repetitive, and not much punctuation and capital letters. It is more like a long poem if you know what I mean.
8/10