A Touching Poem (IF - With a few changes)

[::=::LIAM::=::]

IF - With a few changes

If you can keep on goin when you're tired,
And all you want to do is have a sleep,
If you can keep your job and not get fired,
And never treat your new car like a jeep;
If you can grant your brother all forgiveness
Even though he has angered you so mutch,
If you can shield your friends from harmful business,
Even though you're in some, just a touch:

If you can resolve a fight without violence,
When all around are rolling up their sleeves,
If you can turn away from forced on silence,
And help to open other mouths, it leaves;
If you can achieve your goal with bad weather
When God is turned the other way from you,
Yours truely is the world, the world forever,
And which is more you'll be a good friend too!

BY ::=::LIAM::=::
(Writen in the style of IF, By Rudyard Kipling)

I wrote this poem in English, Plz let me know what you think!

[Surname]

It's good, but that's just like the original with a few alterations...
Try and come up with your own poem, without using anyone else's
4/10

[misspartyqueen]

aww nice poem liam

[::=::LIAM::=::]

It's good, but that's just like the original with a few alterations...
Try and come up with your own poem, without using anyone else's
4/10

lmao cheek that was the task to make your own poem from the original duhhh.
And it aint too much like the original, the only simularities are:
it's got the same rymin scheme
and same syllibals in the lines e.g. 11, 10, 11, 10

I rate u -5 /10 that was cheeky and hurtful, i suggest u try makin your own poem that has to fit in with sum1 elses method

Never mess with Dr.Scouse or i'll egg ya house lmao

[::=::LIAM::=::]

aww nice poem liam

Aww thanks Scouse babe

[Cypher-]

I like it well done liam! keep them coming shakespeare in the making!

[::=::LIAM::=::]

I like it well done liam! keep them coming shakespeare in the making!

Lol tar Neil

[misspartyqueen]

I like it well done liam! keep them coming shakespeare in the making!

i agree

liam if you think the poem good then it good

scouse babe

[::=::LIAM::=::]

i agree

liam if you think the poem good then it good

scouse babe

aww ty *blushes* i aint that gd at poetry

*hands Scouse Babe a trophie*

[::=::LIAM::=::]

Hey guys where's the rep lamo jk

Liverpool!!!!!!!!!!!!!