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    Lightbulb [Poem] Ode to Coffee and Starbucks (About 6 pages in length)

    At my school, for Literature and English Class we had to write a Ode to something. In my case I choose my love of Coffee and Starbucks to write about.
    I dont particuarlly like it but, I think I'll get a good grade on it for class. (The puncutation isnt good in this and I could use some advice on that.) , This is living proof of my obsession. Read and Review, please.

    Ode to Starbucks

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    Where shall I find thee?

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    I smell ye
    I see thee

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Its my home
    Its always’ everywhere
    Even in Rome

    It’s the place to be
    Since it means so much to me
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Coffee so delicious
    The coffee means so much to me

    The coffee here the coffee there
    Starbucks seems to be just everywhere.

    You can always find a cup of the finest espresso
    Everywhere you see
    Starbucks you know, is the place to be

    Smells so delicious of the roasted coffee beans
    It seems as if I’m having a dream.

    Coffee beans
    O’ Coffee Beans
    They smell like the air
    Italian mountains
    Colombian fields
    Mexican farms
    Imported Indonesian
    Brazilian Places
    Coffee grows everywhere
    You see coffee like Starbucks
    Is everywhere

    Coffee so special
    The colors so unique
    The golden browns
    The Dark brown
    The light brown you see

    Coffee beans come in so many different ways
    Starbucks like coffee offers many ways
    Ways of having the coffee how you like it
    Ways of having the coffee sweet
    Ways of having the coffee bitter

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Variety indeed
    Coffee Beans
    Coca Beans
    Tea leaves.
    All special
    All unique
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    If you like coffee you’ll love this place
    Coffee O’ Coffee
    You see Coffee O’ Coffee
    You can always find that special blend
    Time and Time again
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Coffee indeed
    The best place to find that special bean
    That special brew
    The thing that just happens to define you

    You may not see how much coffee is worth
    But in the end its value is priceless.
    All the coffees are good.

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Coffee means so much
    Its not just the occasional such and such.
    Coffee and Starbucks mean so much
    And truly its not the occasional such and such
    And once again I say its worth more than you can see.
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Coffee O’ Coffee
    So many kinds
    You’ll never have the time to try them all

    A lifetime it would take to try them all
    Each time you try to enjoy them all
    You realize that there’s not enough time to
    Enjoy them
    Taste them
    Try them
    And grow to love them

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    All special blends
    I see all the kinds I want to try
    All the kinds
    To see and smell
    Coffee also makes people well

    The many varieties
    Different kinds
    You can constantly try them time after time
    You may think it gets boring and tired
    But coffee shall always brighten up the day

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    The smell
    As you roast in the early morning
    Wakes us all
    The sweet aroma
    The special smell
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    The flavor you bring is something special
    Something unique
    Unique indeed describes coffee
    That special taste
    That special scent
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    That unique place
    Individuality you see
    Starbucks is indeed,
    Is a piece of me, indeed it is.

    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    When in need of Coffee indeed
    I go there
    When in need of a good brew
    I go there
    When in need of a good scone
    I go there
    When indeed of something sweet or bitter
    I go there
    On that cold day, winter snow storm, cloudy day, and rainy day,
    I go there
    For those crunchy coffee beans to munch on
    I go there
    For that cup of tea in times of need or when the coffee maker is broken at home
    I go there
    To enjoy the favorite coffee with friends
    I go there
    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Different coffees
    Different tastes

    The Java’s
    I love so dear
    That coffee’s great
    Even better with friends
    Again and again

    The latte
    Smooth and mellow
    The relaxing cup
    Always good to calm down with

    The espresso
    Bitter and caffeinated
    For those on the go
    It wakes people up
    With all that caffeine
    But it’s always good
    Each and every time

    To all the other coffee’s
    Each time I try you
    There different each time
    I many not remember your name
    But you make me feel the same
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    I have not enough time
    To describe all the kinds
    Tell about how they make me feel
    Tell about how important they are
    But in the end coffee is my life
    Morning and night
    Always never lets me down
    Coffee I’ll always rely on
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    So many varieties to describe
    So many different types
    So many different kinds
    But in the end this place is my home
    And I wouldn’t have it any other way

    At the end of this poem
    I feel I can finally say
    For the last time
    To complete this ode
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Last edited by JavaChip917; 21-05-2005 at 03:42 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JavaChip917
    At my school, for Literature and English Class we had to write a Ode to something. In my case I choose my love of Coffee and Starbucks to write about.
    I dont particuarlly like it but, I think I'll get a good grade on it for class. (The puncutation isnt good in this and I could use some advice on that.) , This is living proof of my obsession. Read and Review, please.

    Ode to Starbucks

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    Where shall I find thee?
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    I smell ye
    I see thee

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Its my home
    Its always(No Apostrophe Here) everywhere
    Even in Rome

    It’s the place to be
    Since it means so much to me
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Coffee so delicious
    The coffee means so much to me

    The coffee here, the coffee there
    Starbucks seems to be just everywhere.

    You can always find a cup of the finest espresso
    Everywhere you see
    Starbucks you know, is the place to be

    Smells so delicious of the roasted coffee beans
    It seems as if I’m having a dream.

    Coffee beans
    O’ Coffee Beans
    They smell like the air
    Italian mountains
    Colombian fields
    Mexican farms
    Imported Indonesian
    Brazilian Places
    Coffee grows everywhere
    You see, coffee like Starbucks
    Is everywhere

    Coffee so special
    The colors so unique
    The golden browns
    The dark brown
    The light brown you see

    Coffee beans come in so many different ways
    Starbucks like coffee offers many ways
    Ways of having the coffee how you like it
    Ways of having the coffee sweet
    Ways of having the coffee bitter

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Variety indeed
    Coffee Beans
    Cocoa Beans
    Tea leaves.
    All special
    All unique
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    If you like coffee you’ll love this place
    Coffee O’ Coffee
    You see Coffee O’ Coffee
    You can always find that special blend
    Time and Time again
    Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    Coffee indeed
    The best place to find that special bean
    That special brew
    The thing that just happens to define you

    You may not see how much coffee is worth
    But in the end its value is priceless.
    All the coffees are good.

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Coffee means so much
    Its not just the occasional such and such.
    Coffee and Starbucks mean so much
    And truly its not the occasional such and such
    And once again I say its worth more than you can see.
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Coffee O’ Coffee
    So many kinds
    You’ll never have the time to try them all

    A lifetime it would take to try them all
    Each time you try to enjoy them all
    You realize that there’s not enough time to
    Enjoy them
    Taste them
    Try them
    And grow to love them

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    All special blends
    I see all the kinds I want to try
    All the kinds
    To see and smell
    Coffee also makes people well

    The many varieties
    Different kinds
    You can constantly try them time after time
    You may think it gets boring and tired
    But coffee shall always brighten up the day

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    The smell
    As you roast in the early morning
    Wakes us all
    The sweet aroma
    The special smell
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    The flavor you bring is something special
    Something unique
    Unique indeed describes coffee
    That special taste
    That special scent
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    That unique place
    Individuality, you see
    Starbucks is indeed,
    Is a piece of me, indeed it is.

    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    When in need of Coffee indeed
    I go there
    When in need of a good brew
    I go there
    When in need of a good scone
    I go there
    When indeed of something sweet or bitter
    I go there
    On that cold day, winter snow storm, cloudy day, and rainy day,
    I go there
    For those crunchy coffee beans to munch on
    I go there
    For that cup of tea in times of need or when the coffee maker is broken at home
    I go there
    To enjoy my favorite coffee with friends
    I go there
    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Different coffees
    Different tastes

    The Java(No Apostrophe Here)s
    I love so dear
    That coffee’s great
    Even better with friends
    Again and again

    The latte
    Smooth and mellow
    The relaxing cup
    Always good to calm down with

    The espresso
    Bitter and caffeinated
    For those on the go
    It wakes people up
    With all that caffeine
    But it’s always good
    Each and every time

    To all the other coffee(No Apostrophe Here)s
    Each time I try you
    They're different each time
    I ma(No N Here)y not remember your name
    But you make me feel the same
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    I have not enough time
    To describe all the kinds
    Tell about how they make me feel
    Tell about how important they are
    But in the end, coffee is my life
    Morning and night
    (No Always Here)Never lets me down
    Coffee I’ll always rely on
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee

    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks
    So many varieties to describe
    So many different types
    So many different kinds
    But in the end this place is my home
    And I wouldn’t have it any other way

    At the end of this poem
    I feel I can finally say
    For the last time
    To complete this ode
    O’ Coffee O’ Coffee
    O’ Starbucks O’ Starbucks

    Mistakes Are Highlighted In Red And Bold As You Asked Dreamer. When I Put Something In Parentheses, It Means I Deleted It.

    Overall It's Very Good

    And Very Long :p

    Things To Improve On:

    -You Repeat The Same Phrase On Lines One After Another Making It Kind Of Repetitive.
    -You Rhyme Sometimes And Not Other Times Which Makes It Kind Of (I Can't Find The Right Word) But It Takes Away From The Quality
    -You Don't Follow A Common Format Which Means That The Number Of Lines Differ, Syllables Differ, What It Ends With Differ, Etc. Etc. And It Takes Away From The Quality As Well. For Example: You End Some Verses And Begin Them With Starbucks O' Starbucks or Coffee O' Coffee But Its Not Consistent And Doesn't Follow A Pattern.

    I Could Pick On Loads Of Little Details But I Won't Because That'll Make You Think It Stinks Which It Doesn't, It's Actually Quite Good.

    So To End On A Good Note-It's A Great Poem, Great Work Mate.
    Last edited by nvrspk4; 21-05-2005 at 06:38 PM. Reason: Spelling xD
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    According to our literature book, odes have no particular format and repition is common. I attempted to stick with that. But ty for the correction's m8
    Last edited by JavaChip917; 21-05-2005 at 06:47 PM. Reason: typos

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    Wow
    Very good poem

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    Good poem. Long... But good.
    And to the person who quoted the whole poem: Just delete the unimportant bits , it makes the post list really long and makes my scroll further
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    hmmm my only criticism is that u should try and make each line have the same syllables in length, although in some places it doesn't rhyme, etc thats a good thing because odes are generally more free verses than anything. overall, great stuff java! very impressed rep+

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    Ty for the rep and the criticism, Its appreciated and I shall try to make the changes suggested as soon as I find the disk I saved it on and write them in word

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