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  1. #1
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    Default Longing for you.

    First poem I've wrote :

    All my life I feel I've needed you,
    I never ever want to let you go
    Chasing after love, will it be true?
    I don't want to go with the flow...

    Sometimes I wonder if you care,
    You never really notice that I am here,
    Is talking to me only of a dare,
    When I talk all I feel is fear

    Now the time has come to see it's light,
    I don't know if I am up to it tonight,
    Us two standing alone in the moonlight,
    Can this love happen, I don't know it might...

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    Bloody good, and lovely xo

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    Thanks I spent ages on it and wanted to think, my friend wants his band to make a song on it

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    Last verse spoils it as it broke the repetition in the rhymming
    8/10

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