Some of my poems - eek

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POEM ONE
A forest lays before me
I hear some ominous sounds
I close my eyes
And let darkness reign

Down by the riverside
where we played as children
echoes in the dark
of our livelyhood.

I stand on a cliff,
watching the water glitter by,
if life ran that smoothly
we wouldn't have lied.

POEM TWO
Hes got a boyfriend
i bet hes fit as hell
god why aren't i his?
had not i done well

i saw him on webcam
will his puppy dog eyes
if were were ogether
there wldn't be any lies

but when love is staring you in the face,
you become a couple wrecking disgrace.

POEM THREE
Why do good things end in confusion?
The answer is too complex
More formulae than zeros in a googolplex
If life had a hand-book mine would be worn out.
I'd flick through its pages,submerged in doubt.

[-=rooty987=-]

The second one is about me hehe

Ahem, was about my old boyfriend, i am now with Lukeeee (lukeisok)

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NOOOOO its embarrasing -.-

[Surname]

If life had a hand-book mine would be worn out.
I'd flick through its pages,submerged in doubt.

I thought these two lines were excellent. Rep for that alone.

I thought your poems were alright, but can be improved
Altogether, for the three poems: 7/10