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  1. 17-06-2005, 07:00 PM #1
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    Default {Poem} {insert name here} (2)

    Here is another poem


    I love him,
    He don't loves me,
    What can i do?
    Why don't he see,
    What's inside me,
    Let me say those little words
    that are hard to speak,
    I want to give a kiss on hes cheek,
    Please help me, someone,
    So my job could be done.
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  2. 17-06-2005, 07:05 PM #2
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    Very Cool ••☺♣☻♠○◘•♦♣ Weird Signs :S
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  3. 17-06-2005, 07:06 PM #3
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    Thx (no ?/10)
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    9/10 lol
    5th October - All Time Low w/ The Audition & TFNB @ Camden Underworld
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    :d mwhuahaha
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  6. 17-06-2005, 08:47 PM #6
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    Wow, thats really deep.
    Its a great poem!!
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  7. 18-06-2005, 08:40 AM #7
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    thanks
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    great poem

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    Sorry to be brutal but..

    You tried too hard to make the words rhyme that you made it sound totally boring, bland, and cliché. Not to mention, lack of grammar doesn't help the poem's structure either. Not that it had one from the beginning, anyways.

    I don't think it's even worthy of an "out of ten" rating.
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  10. 19-06-2005, 09:10 AM #10
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    Ok, now your being rude!
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