Hello Habbox!
As some of you may or may not know. A few weeks back I done a Cadburys Machine as one of my first pixel art thing. I did say it needed improving. As well .... look for yourself.
Luckily you guys where there to tell me what I need to improve etc.
One of my main things I personally wanted to improve on is the shading as FYI I am rubbish at it. However I took a shot at it. Furthermore made edits.
The shading isn't the best but i'll leave it up to you guys whether It is at least better shading than my last one.
There are still things I wanted to improve on this like the writing I wanted to try do it so it looks like its slanting some way as the actual machine but I was finding it difficult.
Comments are appreciated. Please do tell me what I can improve on.
Thanks
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Thread: Cadburys Machine [Updated]
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08-03-2014, 07:27 PM #1
Cadburys Machine [Updated]
Last edited by DryRash; 08-03-2014 at 07:28 PM.
"I have often puzzled and puzzled,
About what it must be like to go to sleep and never wake up!
To be simply not be there, Forever and ever."
Alan Watts
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08-03-2014, 07:51 PM #2
Ye I love the new version!
The panel on the front looks really nicely done, really glad you decided to add that.
And it's really good for one of your first pieces...
Originally Posted by lawrawrrr
There are a lot of things that are personally uncomfortable to show, especially me
without makeup and completely bloated or crying. But I've realized that it's time for me to
show my audience that you don't have to be perfect to achieve your dreams.
Because nobody relates to being perfect.
Katy Perry
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Few points:
Red circle - this is an odd way to shade on this item. It's inconsistent with the rest of the shading. I would advise you have the entirety of the top of it the same shade, or adjust the shading on the rest of the object...
Buttons - The buttons shouldn't be one pixel, you have enough room for 2 px (ive adjusted it in the image up there) and it does make it look a lot better.
The bottom rectangle part.. IDK - I've changed it by making it clear that its 3D... unless it was intended to be one that you have to pull down to open (in which case it needed a handle of some kind)
OH and the top right is very blocky. Common issue, all you'd have to do is try and adjust the lines leading up to that square so that you end up with something like:
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For a first/second piece it's good though, I've seen worse.
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If i could just make 200 spelling mistakes in my message that'd be greattttLast edited by MKR&*42; 08-03-2014 at 07:55 PM.
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08-03-2014, 07:58 PM #4
Thank you! Much appreciated! Originally Posted by :odey:
Thank you for your feedback and illustrations ^_^ Originally Posted by Hayden
Few points:
Red circle - this is an odd way to shade on this item. It's inconsistent with the rest of the shading. I would advise you have the entirety of the top of it the same shade, or adjust the shading on the rest of the object...
Buttons - The buttons shouldn't be one pixel, you have enough room for 2 px (ive adjusted it in the image up there) and it does make it look a lot better.
The bottom rectangle part.. IDK - I've changed it by making it clear that its 3D... unless it was intended to be one that you have to pull down to open (in which case it needed a handle of some kind)
OH and the top right is very blocky. Common issue, all you'd have to do is try and adjust the lines leading up to that square so that you end up with something like:
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For a first/second piece it's good though, I've seen worse.
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If i could just make 200 spelling mistakes in my message that'd be greatttt
Things like that really do help. Thanks +REP
"I have often puzzled and puzzled,
About what it must be like to go to sleep and never wake up!
To be simply not be there, Forever and ever."
Alan Watts
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I really like the second one, the panel looks really good!
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08-03-2014, 10:30 PM #6
Thank you! Originally Posted by Stadiums
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"I have often puzzled and puzzled,
About what it must be like to go to sleep and never wake up!
To be simply not be there, Forever and ever."
Alan Watts
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looks good man
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08-03-2014, 11:56 PM #8
Definitely a big improvement from your first attempt, well done Originally Posted by DryRash
Thank you!
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If you want the text to be slanting, transform it on Photoshop by skewing.
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09-03-2014, 04:37 AM #9
I'm impressed. Keep up the good work.
Maybe send it into Sulake and be like, "Give me Cadbury, or Give me death!"
I'll riot with you until it gets into the hotel. haha!
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09-03-2014, 06:03 AM #10
Like I mentioned in the other thread, grab the cadbury logo and skew it using this tutorial.
http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=153040
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